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Old 05-20-2021, 09:34 AM
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Default New Song I Am Working On

Still a work in progress... feel free to give pointers.

title: never go down
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~v~
when ever life
tempts me to do wrong
i do what's right
cause i know i am strong
and i'll never go down... never go down
~v~
i gotta try
try to do my best
so when it's time
i will pass the test
and i'll never go down... never go down
~c~
and this world is changing
and people are raging
it's all so frustrating
and my hope... is fading
but i'll never go down... never go down
~v~
i've lived and loved
i've won and lost
and through it all
i have paid the cost
and i'll never go down... never go down
~v~
and when my time
when my time is gone
i know that i
i will carry on
and i'll never go down... never go down
~c~
this world is our treasure
if we stay together
no matter the weather
it will get... much better
and we'll never go down... never go down
and we'll never go down... never go down
... never go down
... never go down
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Old 05-26-2021, 11:22 PM
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I like the title / refrain.

Here are a few observations to kick around. The song is very much about you except the last set of lyrics. Before the, even when you talk about the world changing / people raging right after that you mention your reaction/feelings about that.

The section about what happens when your time is up may need a little work. My thought was that when my time is up I will indeed go down in that I will pass away. (But there may be a sense in which the impact of what one has done while alive continues on for at least a bit, etc.)

Keep up the good work.
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