Too True

[TXKirk]

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A little ditty inspired by my bride.


Music and Lyrics by Kirk Whitehead

[Ranger1964]

Another slick groove. On originals it is always good to post the lyrics. I hear a chorus in there a gain I hear sort of a quick double strum type thing

Baby you been here, a long long time
and you been such, a friend o' mine
You know I'll love you ,as long as I can
And I'll be your,....... forever man

seems like you get a good groove going and then use the verses to tell the whole story. There are some songs written that way, but the majority are broken up with a chorus and or bridge. I like your groove and think these both are just a few mods away from being really cool songs!

[TXKirk]

thanks man. that was 10 minutes. I turned on the recorder and just started playing. I opened my mouth and the words just came out.

My mom always said i was hard headed, I guess I kinda like the story telling more than "proper" song structure.

Down with the man!!!

kirk

[Battleman]

Originally Posted by Ranger1964

Another slick groove. On originals it is always good to post the lyrics. I hear a chorus in there a gain I hear sort of a quick double strum type thing

Baby you been here, a long long time
and you been such, a friend o' mine
You know I'll love you ,as long as I can
And I'll be your,....... forever man

seems like you get a good groove going and then use the verses to tell the whole story. There are some songs written that way, but the majority are broken up with a chorus and or bridge. I like your groove and think these both are just a few mods away from being really cool songs!

+1..Im with Ranger, Nice groove. Thanks for sharing. He suggested some good lines to a chorus..Keep em coming dude. Good stuff..Solo

[millerzj]

Like the "Texas Blues" style riff and your vocal style fits the song well. I'll agree with Ranger that a bridge or something would help the song structure, just break up the repeated riff a bit. Good job bro. Thanks for sharing.

[Ranger1964]

Originally Posted by TXKirk

thanks man. that was 10 minutes. I turned on the recorder and just started playing. I opened my mouth and the words just came out.

My mom always said i was hard headed, I guess I kinda like the story telling more than "proper" song structure.

Down with the man!!!

kirk

I hear ya and that is exactly how I felt early on, but I got some great advice here and then looked at it as using the chorus to further tell the story or to "set the stage" for what is going to happen later in the song. I wrote one called Good Advice and early in the song the singer's father offers some "good advice" and then in final part of the song and story the "good advice" comes directly into play. You can also use a bridge to further tell a story or sometimes have the story make a dramatic turn. SO look at those pieces as more story telling. I sort of actually look at a song as each piece being a song that needs a melody and verse that then all fit together. It is really like writing 2 or 3 songs.

[rhancox]

I liked the groove as well. Nicely done, especially for just winging it after pressing the red button.

I kinda take the opposite view on adding a bridge to this song. I don't think one would fit. I mean, where would you go, chord-wise? I really think this is a perfect example of a song not needing a bridge.

Maybe hesitate at the start of a verse. Like, hit the opening chord, hesitate a beat or two, maybe sing a word or two, then start in. Like I had mentioned in Solo's original, with that type of variation, you can make the listener forget that they are hearing the same chords over and over.