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Catchy melody and the words sing well. If I were to get pernickety, my one suggestion would be in the first line, ……. “oh so long” I think It sings well but I would like something that gives the listener a better sense of the passage of time. But cool song with a a traditional sea shanty vibe to it We had a major storm passed through with loads of lightning and thunder. My internet has been down for a few days. Once it’s up and running I will post a work in progress. . Hope others join in.
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The idea of a songwriting prompt is to "prompt" us to write something new.
That being said, "The Sea" is not getting me, being a Midwesterner. Plus a local venue I really like is requesting local songwriter people to write a song about the locale. A contest with "prizes. And it needs to be done by 8/27, so I've been working on that one. I think I have something now. But I've got to iron out the wrinkles before I make a recording next week some time. I'll post it here for yucks, but it will not be seaworthy.
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Finally got my internet back
Here’s a rough draft that takes a slight tangent from the prompt. I’m lyrically struggling with it but I won’t go into the issues I have with it, for I don’t want to bias anyone (shut up and play the song ) I will say that I need to rework the arch of the melody for a better lead into the chorus, and as of yet there is no bridge (not sure where to go with it), so after the second chorus the guitar drones on. Look forward to any and all critiques Wherever I Go There I Am Think I’ll take the long way home And drive on up the coast Through the outer banks Where wild horses use to roam Where Calico kid and Captain jack Jolly-Rodgered on the sea And 2 brothers built an air-o-plane And flew into history ch I came through here long ago When I was a younger man Moving/traveling at the speed of thought Kicking up the sand before I knew wherever I go There I am I’m At the prancing pony Gonna Got a room here for a while Give now and then the time/chance they need to reconcile…… All the memories I never gave My- Self the chance to make And Live before tomorrow turns Into yesterday for today
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This isn’t new but fits the criteria. Wrote it many years ago for my Dad and my sons.
My Love of the Sea When I was a young boy we’d take to the ocean East of Egg Harbor my father and me. To fish the deep waters, the wrecks and the canyons, And that was the start of my love of the sea. Up before dawn to sail on the new tide, Back to the docks as the sun starts to fade. Knowing tomorrow’s another adventure, Tired and tanned from a day without shade. Chorus: And I sometimes believe, those were the best days that I’ll ever see. I was feeling so free. Daddy and I and the South Jersey sky, just we three, Fishing the shoals and loving the sea. A child turns to teens and the teens into twenties, The course that we chart is the one that we choose. And much like the sand that we grasp in our fingers The tighter we hold it, the more that we lose. Chorus: And I sometimes believe, I’ve spent my best days in some fantasy. A strange legacy Guided by fate ‘cause I can’t navigate past the reefs That always betray my love of the sea. Break: And I still recall my Father’s words as we outran a squall: "Any sailor can take the till When the wind is calm and the seas are still." I now walk the beaches and stare at the ocean, Horizons of truth as yet unrevealed. Forever my Father will live in my memory, Standing beside me his hands at the wheel. Thirty years on now, and I have my own son. He smiles and the future seems clearer to me. Someday I’m hoping to take him out sailing Where he’ll learn to live with a love of the sea. Chorus: And I sometimes believe, today is the best day that I’ll ever see 'Cause I’ve finally been freed. I've burned all my charts, gonna’ steer by the stars to my lee, As I sing my song of love to the sea.
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Do you have a melody/music.Anything recorded. My 2 cents. With inflation thats worth 1 cent “To fish the deep waters, the wrecks and the canyons,” How about adding an adjective to these words, ones that would give more of a visual ……. Blue waters instead of deep, Coral coated shipwrecks, Of course it would mess with the prosody, if you already have a melody. But you can leave out canyons if room is needed “Up before dawn to sail on the new tide” “New” to me is redundant since you already say “dawn” Of course this is one person’s opinion, And you know what they say about opinions….
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Thanks. Prompts are great motivation for getting me off my bum, even if the song winds going in another direction. I got a love-hate relationship with me voice. It’s a grass is greener situation, but I’m (almost) at the point where I’m ok with it. I hear it’s common for singers to have this kind of relationship with their voice, especially when they start recording. Thanks. I’ll come back to it in a few weeks to work on a bridge
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Great lyric.
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OK. I didn't do the "Sea" as I said. But I did write a song for a local venue's Songwriter Contest. Entries are due this Saturday. The "prompt" for that was to write a song about the NW suburban area of Chicago where the venue resides. So, I came up with this. Here's a kitchen recorded video of it.
Lyrics are: Let’s go for a walk down to Vail Avenue I hear music in the park. Meet up with some friends. Find a good park bench Listen to the Summer sounds Me and you. No cars are allowed. Just a happy crowd On a sunny afternoon Find a nice café. While away the day Have some wine and good food Me and you. Sun on your face, brightens up my day Gentle touch of your perfume Breeze in your hair, Laughter in the air. Nothing I would rather do Than be with you When the sun goes down, they light up the town. Like a fairytale come true Buy an ice cream cone, before heading home Whistling a happy tune Me and you Stars in your eyes. Brighten up the night Gentle touch of your perfume Moonlit hair. Laughter in the air Nothing I would rather do Than be with you Me and you.
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