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Help me with a blues number
The women at work are still listening to Christmas music. I could only power through listening to Grown Up Christmas List so many times BEFORE Christmas. No way I can handle that now.
I tried to talk them into playing some delta blues, but to no avail. So I started singing some blues. This is what I've come up with so far: My woman left me, then she stole my car Run over my dog before she left the yard And I tell you... I sure do miss that dog I'm fairly sure I've got a blues classic in the making. I just need some help fleshing it out. More verses! What have you got?
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If you use the 3rd line as part of another verse, you have to find a rhyme for dog - which is not easy. (I mean, there a few rhymes, but not easy to fit into the theme.) Maybe change it to "I sure miss that dog, he was my only friend." Repeat that, then something like "My heart is sure broken, it ain't never going to mend." Actually, the heart is broken line might be better as the first couple of lines, so the dog being your friend is the punch line! (You're not heartbroken because your woman left! ) My heart is sure broken, it ain't never going to mend Lawd my heart is sure broken, it ain't never going to mend I sure miss that dog, he was my only friend Next verse: I feel like gettin' drunk, head down to my local bar Get out of my mind, down at my local bar But it's 10 miles away, and my woman done stole my car Now carry on...
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Hmm. I was thinking of doing an AAB CCB rhyming scheme, with "And I tell you... I sure do miss that dog" ending every verse.
I was mulling over how before she left she cheated on him with his brother, now they've run off together, and he sure does miss that dog. She emptied the bank account, took all the money. And before she left she took his last bottle of booze, and he sure does miss that dog. And he wasn't just his brother, he was him employer. So now he's also out of work, and he sure does miss that dog.
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I agree that for traditional 12 bar blues the first line is repeated. I was going for more of a Johnny Cash Folsom Prison, Cocaine Blues, Boy Named Sue feel.
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Bad luck and trouble will never end
My woman left me and took my best friend
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"The woman I love, stole her from my best friend That joker got lucky, stole her back again."
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got them dog gone blues
and im dog gone blue be a long time yet for another loving pet dog gone blues letting me to keep on fretting at least when i play i dont think about today making this guitar cry like the tears in my eyes i cant do it anymore cause of that 2 bit w... and i tell you, i sure do miss that dog
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My dog left me today
My woman stole my old rusty car Lost my job on Friday Monday I'm gonna be drinking hard At some busted out bar You know the story You heard the news Ain't no use in frighten it When ya got the Untrustful woman and backstabbing dog Blues. (I sure do miss that dog) (That alright I still got my guitar) Then launch in to the guitar solo.. lol Well ,, it's a start Last edited by Scuzzo; 01-09-2022 at 09:50 AM. |
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