#1
|
|||
|
|||
LATE HEARTBREAKER
Still trying to decide how I feel about this one. I'm thinking of this as a primitive rock piece (if that's even a thing!)
I hear a Rod Stewart vibe in my mind with this one. LATE HEARTBREAKER 1. Her love is nothin' but a game of dirty pool Stringin' you along she makes ya feel cool With her sights set on a maximum effect Of breakin' your heart, leavin' you a wreck CHORUS SHE'S A LATE HEARTBREAKER DOWN TO THE LAST MINUTE LATE HEARTBREAKER, THAT'S HOW SHE'LL WIN IT LATE HEARTBREAKER, SHE HAS TO MAKE A SCENE LATE HEARTBREAKER, SHE'S A HEARTBREAKER MACHINE 2. There ain't no doubt she's beyond the beyonds A suntanned body, she's a natural blonde Struttin' on legs that reach to the ceiling Everything about her is downright appealing BRIDGE You think you can win her but there's a price to pay Nothin' you can ever do will get her to stay She lives to dump ya and leave ya heartbroke Playin' down to the wire that's her masterstroke CHORUS SHE'S A LATE HEARTBREAKER DOWN TO THE LAST MINUTE LATE HEARTBREAKER, THAT'S HOW SHE'LL WIN IT LATE HEARTBREAKER, SHE HAS TO MAKE A SCENE LATE HEARTBREAKER, SHE'S A HEARTBREAKER MACHINE
__________________
1972 Yamaha FG200 (shop guitar) 1982 commissioned Kazuo Yairi DY90 2015 Martin HD28 VTS custom shop |
#2
|
|||
|
|||
As an example of how my lyrics can evolve with revision and editing, I'm posting the final version of this song. This takes into account a few suggestions I got on a songwriter forum. Having anyone understand the concept of someone being "late with breaking a heart" was a stretch at best. Instead of scrapping all elements of this song entirely, I took some of the best ideas and completely changes the ideas contained in the original lyrics. The title changed to NATURAL FOOL as well. I'm finally happy with this!
NATURAL FOOL 1. There's no doubt she's beyond the beyonds A suntanned body, she's a natural blonde Struttin' on legs that reach to the ceiling Everything about her is vastly appealing 2. Guys wanna win her, there's a price to pay No man was ever able to get her to stay She lives to end it & leave 'em heartbroke Stringin' 'em along that's her masterstroke (CHORUS) SHE SEDUCES WITH AN AURA OF CHARM & MYSTERY SHE'S JUST LIKE EVERY FEMME FATALE IN HISTORY HER LOVE IS NOTHIN' BUT A GAME OF DIRTY POOL SHE LIVES TO TURN A MAN INTO A NATURAL FOOL SHE LIVES TO TURN A MAN INTO A NATURAL FOOL 3. You're thinkin' that it can never happen to you Givin' it your all, that's the best you can do But when her mind is on a maximum effect Her only desire is just to leave ya a wreck You'll be next to star in her favorite scene, where She gets to show she's a heartbreak machine (BRIDGE) Go for it brother, give it your best shot She's only 'bout to tie ya up in a knot You're just gonna have yourself to blame When you get yourself caught up in her game (CHORUS) SHE SEDUCES WITH AN AURA OF CHARM & MYSTERY SHE'S JUST LIKE EVERY FEMME FATALE IN HISTORY HER LOVE IS NOTHIN' BUT A GAME OF DIRTY POOL SHE LIVES TO TURN A MAN INTO A NATURAL FOOL SHE LIVES TO TURN A MAN INTO A NATURAL FOOL
__________________
1972 Yamaha FG200 (shop guitar) 1982 commissioned Kazuo Yairi DY90 2015 Martin HD28 VTS custom shop |
#3
|
|||
|
|||
I read your most recent post before the first one and when I read your lyrics, I was getting a Rod Stewart vibe. So, you sure got that across in the rhythm of the lyrics. I hope that you can post a recording.
Best, Jayne |
#4
|
|||
|
|||
Quote:
|
#5
|
|||
|
|||
Here's the rough garage recorded demo
https://soundcloud.com/user-566557345/natural-fool
__________________
1972 Yamaha FG200 (shop guitar) 1982 commissioned Kazuo Yairi DY90 2015 Martin HD28 VTS custom shop |
#6
|
|||
|
|||
Quote:
Thanks for posting this. I enjoyed listening to it. Best, Jayne |
#7
|
|||
|
|||
This song has been keeping me awake at night. Something was off with even the first revision. I felt like it was demanding to be rewritten from a very different slant. This is the first time I’ve ever used the lyrics from a song to completely write another song! I had comments about the term “heartbreak machine “ when I played it for people and that seemed to be where the emphasis was supposed to be. So, here is the final version titled Heartbreak Machine. I’ll record this soon and post it. My video of it is getting a lot more response than the first version did. I’m glad this is the first time I’ve encountered this need and hope it doesn’t become a new normal!
There ain't no doubt she's beyond the beyonds A slim, tanned beauty, she's a natural blonde She's seductive with a touch of charm & mystery She's the worst heartbreaker in history Stringin' men along has to be her masterstroke Doin' her level best to leave 'em heartbroke She's the worst love disaster anybody ever seen She's a world class livin' heartbreak machine (CHORUS) HER LOVE AIN'T NOTHIN' BUT A GAME OF DIRTY POOL SHE CAN TURN ANY MAN INTO A NATURAL FOOL SHE LIVES TO STAR IN HER FAVORITE SCENE WHERE SHE GET TO SHOW SHE'S A HEARTBREAK MACHINE SHE OUGHTA WIN AN OSCAR ON THE SILVER SCREEN WITH HER REAL LIFE ACT OF A HEARTBREAK MACHINE Men all wish she was the one they were datin' I'm here to warn she's a daughter of Satan She struts around on legs that reach to the ceilin' Everything about her seems so vastly appealin' (BRIDGE) I learned firsthand there's a huge price to pay I thought my tears would never go away I fell hard when I looked in her blue eyes I rained like dark clouds up in the skies (CHORUS)
__________________
1972 Yamaha FG200 (shop guitar) 1982 commissioned Kazuo Yairi DY90 2015 Martin HD28 VTS custom shop |
#8
|
|||
|
|||
https://soundcloud.com/user-56655734...tbreak-machine
Here’s rough demo of final version of lyrics
__________________
1972 Yamaha FG200 (shop guitar) 1982 commissioned Kazuo Yairi DY90 2015 Martin HD28 VTS custom shop |