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A song that I wrote - feedback welcome
Pretty much as the title says really, written and recorded fairly quickly and basically. If you can provide would be greatly received.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KythZXBf9xI |
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Nice song. Really great melody and strumming. It would be great if you would post the lyrics. I would like to hear the vocals just a tad more out front and the tambourine a little lower. Well done.
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Very beautiful song. The second recording was definitely better, but only in terms of recording quality. Both versions were performed equally well.
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Yup, think you need to bring the vocals up in the mix. A decent tune - think you need some more variety in the tune, at least a different bridge.
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Hi Guys,
Thanks for the feedback, I will maybe re record it at some point with the suggestions you have made but at present I am working on something else. For those of you that wanted the lyrics...... This could be the last time of our lives This could be the longest of goodbyes You and I still speak from time to time Im sorry for not coming when you cried Now we're old, we must try Try to keep this love alive Though you're gone, theres still time There's no need to say good bye This has changed forever, in all our lives No matter what we do, or how we try The days are falling by just like the rain I hope that where you are, you feel no pain Now we're old, we must try Try to keep this love alive Though you're gone, theres still time There's no need to say good bye See my face, theres no smile It gets like that once each while Though you're gone, theres still time Never want to say goodbye Im not looking for a lyrical crytique if thats ok, the song is about the passing of someone very dear to me so im not looking for lyrical advice. Thanks again for responding guys. Last edited by kenneth050881; 08-30-2010 at 10:13 PM. |
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Very nice heartfelt song. I like it.
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