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Old 12-31-2019, 02:33 PM
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Nice tune.

I'd change the title to "I'm Never Alone When I think of You."

Change "Crusts" to "Crumbs" (feeding the birds)

Somehow I think a nice instrumental section would fit in there between verses too (similar to what you did near the end).

This is all coming from a instrumental player who writes tunes in like 30 minutes, LOL, so take it from there
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