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Old 12-29-2019, 09:32 AM
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Wouldn't change a thing at this point. What I would do is use it to develop further as a scratch track. Keeping it as-is is fine for soloing. I'd bring in another guitar on top of the current melody to complement (not command) its presence. From there a bass line (acoustic) could find a good place beneath it and (possibly) a vocal harmony might work on the chorus, or a more commanding solo delivery for it. I'd have to hear it.

At the moment you're giving us a pretty formal vocal delivery, which I think can be made more conversational in style, because it is something you would otherwise say that way in a heart-to-heart (aka more natural). Think Dylan or Waits.

Good song. I was playing along and can definitely see this song finding popularity in a couple genres.
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