Solid ideas and foundation. The only thing I'd critique is the repetitive nature.
When going to the 2nd fret barre chord for the 2nd time, grab the open then first fret of the bass notes for a chromatic walk. Instead of root and fifth, grab the inverted fifth occasionally.
For the chorus, maybe alternate the inflections.
This is the place I call home
This is the place I (dramatic pause) call home
Perhaps a little too stereotypical, sustain "home" the last time around.
Simple things can spice things up without reinventing the wheel.
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