Best Western Motel Saturday Night - Original song

[flatbaroque]

Hi folks.Something I just wrote.In open G.Hope some of you like it.Any feedback welcome.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2NvK2r4Br7E

She left her hometown,
Kept her hometown blues
Sat deep in her eyes
Best Western motel
On Saturday night
Ceiling fan can hypnotize

Kiss in the steeple
From Johnny B Bad
The chivalrous rescue
From Sir Galahad
Pony tail love
From pages ago
Ghosts are restless tonight

She’s out on the road
Sellin’ what people don’t need
Is your coverage all right?
Guess it’s a living
Makin’ stones bleed
It’s hard to keep up the fight

Pennywise and pennydumb
She played both sides of the coin

Ghosts are stretching their legs tonight
There’s dashing Juan come into sight
He was the mechanic
With the high Cuban heels
Who danced the flamenco
Between changing her wheels

They even spoke once about
Having a kid
Then out of the blue
he went back to Madrid

Best Western Motel Saturday night
She turns on the TV, turns down the light
She’ll watch it again The African Queen
And hopes that old boat
Steams through her dream

Her view’s from the cheap seats
But it’s still pretty clear
If you’re not being loved
You might just disappear

[mlazare]

I really enjoyed that !!

[Irish Dave]

Pretty nice. Liked it -- especially lyrically. You might consider some kind of chorus or repeating lines to help tie it all together, but otherwise nice job. Thanks for sharing.

[SalFromChatham]

I'll give you some feedback. That's awesome. You can write music for sure.

[martingitdave]

Great lyrics. I read them a few times. I like the imagery and metaphors.

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[skim500]

Nicely done.

[BUDSTER]

Well done both musically and lyrically. Love the emotion that you put into this song !

Bud

[flatbaroque]

Thanks kindly folks.Nice to get some feedback on an original.Songwriting doesn't come so easy (to me), so some encouragement is enjoyable!