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Song writing snafu
Hi
I have this quirky little indie-pop song I’m working on. A quick tip from someone might help me out. The key is C. Going from the verse to the chorus is fine, (no bridge). But since the chorus ends on a C, going back to the verse (C) feels a bit underwhelming. Something’s missing. Maybe some nice little cliche.. I need some sort of (fast) bridge from the chorus back to the verse. I know this is little information on the song, but that may be just as well. Any thoughts?
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It definitely needs more cowbell.
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Try Bb (or FMaj7)
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It's so hard to say without knowing the style & feel, the chord progression of both the chorus & verse, etc.
All that said one way to handle this would be to end the chorus on an Am to extend the resolution to the "C" of the next verse with a couple more chords...like maybe: Am > F > G > C (verse starts) or if you want a real short segue: Am > G > C (verse starts) or if you want something a little more colorful: Am > D7 > Dm > G7 > C (verse starts) This is just one way to handle something like this. So much depends on what has already happened and the style/feel. HTH
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Practically impossible without hearing the song.
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Thanks for your suggestions [emoji1303] I’ll try all of them out this afternoon.
It’s an uptempo New wave / punk type of song, (reminiscent of Devo) with few barre chords and a lot of percussive strumming on muted strings. The challenge lays in the tempo, succinct with little room for musical ornaments. So quite straight forward. Verse: C - F - C C - F - C B - E - B C - F - C (All repeated x3) Chorus: G - D - E G - E - C G - D - E G - E - C That last C in the Chorus and first C in the verse don’t sit right with me. It may not be one of the most talked about genre in this forum. But western pop music is western pop music in and I find that the musical knowledge in here is high.
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This definitely harmonies with the rest. Liked the quick version best. Great tip! Thank you [emoji4]
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What has already been said and or, also consider perhaps Starting on the last C in chorus just strum it once and then do a single note walk up and back down to C being the start of the next verse
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Yeah, I found the last C substituted by Am a nice ‘surprising’ chord change that a song like this needs. The melody on paper seems basic. It’s the percussive execution I liked in the first place and what I think has got something. Along with the falsetto singing I wish I had the range for.. 🤣 I try to make the songs I write for my band fun and not too serious, but of course it’s “dead serious” that it sounds cool to me.. No matter how simple they may appear. Transitions and bridges seem so unstrained in great songwriting that it’s easy to overlook by e.g a great chorus (maybe that’s why there is ten professional songwriters on a hit nowadays.. I saw a documentary on Elton John and his songwriting partner the other day. Where he talks about writing one of those huge evergreen hits in 15minutes... incredible!
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