Gypsy in my Bones- new original

bluesguy63 · #1 01-03-2018, 06:57 PM

Only the second song I've ever written...critique appreciated!

https://soundcloud.com/bluesguy1963/gypsy-in-my-bones

reeve21 · #2 01-03-2018, 07:19 PM

Hi BG 63,

I like it! Nice theme, good consistent guitar backing.

For your consideration-- little more variation in the dynamics, maybe even a bridge?

Good work!!!

bluesguy63 · #3 01-04-2018, 07:16 AM

I appreciate it....like I said, brand new to songwriting-I barely know what a verse, chorus and bridge even are

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dgimcmillan · #4 01-04-2018, 12:10 PM

I really like the song premise, and your verses are nicely developed, too. Get your wife to be quiet next time you record <grin>.

It's already been suggested that you put a bridge in, and probably an instrumental break, too. I think that would really help the dynamics.

I think this is one of those songs that I would be singing along to, every time I heard it! Great piece!

Glennwillow · #5 01-04-2018, 12:48 PM

Hi Bluesguy63!

Nice job on this! Certainly a good start! I felt like I was right there with you!

- Glenn

bluesguy63 · #6 01-04-2018, 12:57 PM

Thanks guys and 10-4 on the wife being quiet. I had accidentally knocked over a vase before I went into the music room and shut the door and, of course, 3/4 of the way through the song she pops in and ask what I broke....I need a "recording in progress" sign lol

Glennwillow · #7 01-04-2018, 01:04 PM

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Originally Posted by bluesguy63

Thanks guys and 10-4 on the wife being quiet. I had accidentally knocked over a vase before I went into the music room and shut the door and, of course, 3/4 of the way through the song she pops in and ask what I broke....I need a "recording in progress" sign lol

It takes a little experience for everyone to know that they need to be quiet during a recording. I was recently recording a bell choir at a church, and it took a while for the bell ringers to understand that they can't be talking during the recording.

With practice and experience, everyone and everything will get better.

- Glenn

delaorden9 · #8 01-04-2018, 02:47 PM

Hi, writing an original song is a huge step forward.....practice will improve your gift. Keep it up, this one sounds already nice !