A Breath of Fresh Air

Adam Whitney · #1 10-13-2012, 01:55 PM

Here is a new song I started writing about a week and a half ago. It's not finished, nor is it the best recording, but I figured it would give a good preview of my newest material. Hope you guys enjoy, and please feel free to leave a comment!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vVbt5k26RT0

flatbaroque · #2 10-14-2012, 06:06 AM

that's terrific.a powerful piece of writing and talented playing.i predict you are going to write a lot of good music in your time.

Bob1131 · #3 10-14-2012, 06:13 AM

Very nice. That's some very good flat picking work, too.

SteveA · #4 10-14-2012, 10:21 AM

Haunting tune.....IRIS by the Goo Goo Dolls written all over it....

Matter of fact I went to YOU TUBE heard a live version and you sound so much better sound quality wise....

My only suggestion is to not stop with jusT music only.....It would be IMO a huge mistake......THIS TUNE BEGS FOR A HAUNTING, MEMORABLE MELODY....

If the words and Melody don't match up to the sound....Write, Write & Re-Write......This is where the "work" really begins, not settling on average Lyrics & Melody......I just think this song needs to get Married and be bigger than it is now.....that's how good it is...

It's a good song now....but can be great....

Just a thought

rick-slo · #5 10-14-2012, 10:41 AM

Thanks for sharing - sounds good. Do be careful with the open tunings tendency of staying in one chord practically the whole time - in this case D. Write some music in standard tuning or at least modal tunings.

Adam Whitney · #6 10-14-2012, 11:49 AM

To flatbaroque,

Thank you very much for the nice feedback! I wanted to post something that displays some of my different styles. I have more songs with different feels, but this one was the one I thought I should post. I hope to continue writing in this direction for a while; it’s quite a nice change up from my other songs Circles and Eternity

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To Bob1311,

Thanks, I’ve been working on trying to get my strumming more precise. This song has a lot of new patterns I haven’t used before, so it’s been a challenge to keep my wrist moving fluently throughout the song.
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To SteveA,

Well, I have to say I disagree about adding vocals. I love my music the way it is, except I do agree that the song needs more voicing. When I get finished with the blueprint, I plan to go back and add a lead over it, something to add a stronger melody to it. I also enjoy writing poetry, but that is a separate field for me. Regardless, I’m glad you enjoyed what I have so far, and I thank you for the input!
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To rick-slo,

I do have a song or two written in drop D, and I’m working on learning scales and modes in standard. I have many tunings that I have stumbled upon, around 8 or 9, so I have a lot of variation to play with. I’m still working on learning musical theory so I will be able to actually know what I am playing. Until then it’s just a matter of how hard I’m willing to push myself. I appreciate the feedback!

stevejazzx · #7 10-14-2012, 05:34 PM

Hi Adam
As much as I liked this I felt you were playing safe somehow with this piece - I was waiting for something - I'm not sure what!
You're obviously a naturally gifted guitarist and I can see you make a real connection with the music while you're playing - I am very much looking forward to hearing more -

Steve

Adam Whitney · #8 10-14-2012, 05:39 PM

To Steve,

Thank you for the comment! I feel the piece is missing something too, but I don't have the blueprint finished yet. It's great as is, but I feel it needs a little something extra.

Fruitloop · #9 10-15-2012, 03:37 AM

Very nice piece, you're a talented guitarist and musician. I must agree with the others, it needs a lead melody.

Adam Whitney · #10 10-20-2012, 09:09 PM

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Originally Posted by Fruitloop

Very nice piece, you're a talented guitarist and musician. I must agree with the others, it needs a lead melody.

To Fruitloop,

Yes, I agree it needs a lead part to help the flow of the song move forward through the piece. Maybe soon I will be able to think of something to go along with it. Thanks for the feedback!