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12-22-2016, 01:17 PM
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Dear Ex-Wife [Songwriting Help]
I was just goofing around with a new song idea and recorded a scratch run-through. It's intended to be played live in a small setting, like a get together with friends. So I don't think it translates well to a recording. The intro will be impromptu to each time I play it so it fits the context better than it does here. When I have played it, I snuck it in as part of the conversation. Afterwords, it occurred to a friend of mine that it was actually a performance, not a conversation. That's exactly what I was intending.
 Anyway, I'd love to here suggestions.
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Original music here: Spotify Artist Page Last edited by RedJoker; 12-22-2016 at 01:28 PM. 
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12-22-2016, 01:28 PM
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The link doesn't work...
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12-22-2016, 01:36 PM
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12-22-2016, 02:05 PM
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Nice work!
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12-22-2016, 04:15 PM
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How about
Dear extra-wife, on one thing I was wrong I thought you weren't worth anything But now I have this song A little less harsh, but maybe that steals the punch line you want
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12-22-2016, 04:21 PM
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Integrating spoken-word storytelling and songwriting seamlessly is an artform in itself. In my experience performers like Guy Clark, Verlon Thompson and Roy Bookbinder come to mind as masters of the form. You've done a really nice job of crafting that kind of mixed art performance. If it works for me in the rather anonymous and sterile universe of an isolated recording I'll bet it'll be a real crowd pleaser in front of a live audience. Nice delivery of a good concept!
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12-22-2016, 04:23 PM
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AKA 'Screamin' Tooth Parker' You can listen to Walt's award winning songs with his acoustic band The Porch Pickers @ the Dixie Moon album or rock out electrically with Rock 'n' Roll Reliquary Bourgeois AT Mahogany D Gibson Hummingbird Martin J-15 Voyage Air VAD-04 Martin 000X1AE Squier Classic Vibe 50s Stratocaster Squier Classic Vibe Custom Telecaster PRS SE Standard 24
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12-22-2016, 04:27 PM
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Maybe, too, add another nice thing about your wife--who likely is in the audience. How about:
She's sweet and witty, smart and pretty And we're growing every day Or something...
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12-24-2016, 05:38 AM
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Thanks for all the suggestions! I played this at an open mic and recorded it as well. Its very helpful for listening to what works, what didn't work. I'll keep working on it!
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12-26-2016, 10:36 PM
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Good work!
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