New original-feedback

bluesguy63 · #1 11-15-2017, 09:08 PM

Only the second song I've ever wrote...feedback appreciated!
"Leave This Town Behind"

https://soundcloud.com/bluesguy1963/...is-town-behind

reeve21 · #2 11-15-2017, 09:20 PM

Really nice! Your voice is really suited to the tune and lyric. I think a short bridge might fit nicely as well. Great job!

bluesguy63 · #3 11-16-2017, 08:35 AM

I appreciate your time...I did feel like it maybe needs a little something else but like I said...I'm brand new to this songwriting stuff.

reeve21 · #4 11-16-2017, 09:00 AM

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Originally Posted by bluesguy63

I appreciate your time...I did feel like it maybe needs a little something else but like I said...I'm brand new to this songwriting stuff.

Well keep it up, this is a great start

I heard something around 1:30 that made me think a bridge or instrumental break was coming up...maybe you were doing some sort of chord substitution at the end of the verse. Your voice is very pleasing