New Original Song! Listen :)

[Jonas - Lalaldd]

Here it is:

https://soundcloud.com/jonas-finn-la...nt-waste-a-day

Cool if you want to listen I dont got anything special to say just that i'm having alot of fun making songs at the moment. It's nice to hear what people think of it.

Thanks!

[SunnyDee]

I liked it.

Like the production with the vocals, too, imo. I like the layering in it. Your production skills are clearly improving over time.

Music: Very pretty, had kind of a Spanish feel to me, then went in another direction with the vocal. I listened (quickly) to a few more of yours. Do they tend to have a Spanish feel sometime or is that my imagination? Using some Spanish-like scales?

Lyrics: Nice, made me think about them, the way they hint at a story without being too cryptic makes it very "listenable". This is what I heard, a little different from what you have written.

In this (a?)waking life

I go wrong sometimes (in the?) inside

....

And you can be any(thing)

I (won't) waste a day

[Glennwillow]

Hi Jonas,

Very well done! Thank you for sharing this with us!

- Glenn

Great Jonas! Sounds very Middle Eastern to me actually.

[Jonas - Lalaldd]

Originally Posted by SunnyDee

I liked it.

Like the production with the vocals, too, imo. I like the layering in it. Your production skills are clearly improving over time.

Music: Very pretty, had kind of a Spanish feel to me, then went in another direction with the vocal. I listened (quickly) to a few more of yours. Do they tend to have a Spanish feel sometime or is that my imagination? Using some Spanish-like scales?

Lyrics: Nice, made me think about them, the way they hint at a story without being too cryptic makes it very "listenable". This is what I heard, a little different from what you have written.

In this (a?)waking life

I go wrong sometimes (in the?) inside

....

And you can be any(thing)

I (won't) waste a day

Very nice comment. Thank you! I dont have a specific scale or sound in mind when I write, it is more just how I play I guess. I just fool around with the guitar and find things I think are interesting and sound good.

Glad you like the lyrics! They have some common theme but it is mostly just me pouring out what I feel at the moment. I changed the lyrics text to what you said. It is correct now Thanks again for your comment!

[richnrbq]

Love the whole feel of this, especially the vocals. Great melody, strong structure- well done!

[Jonas - Lalaldd]

Originally Posted by richnrbq

Love the whole feel of this, especially the vocals. Great melody, strong structure- well done!

Thank you! I really appreciate it

[rokdog49]

I liked the song...
Liked the production.
The phrasing of the lyrics seemed a little jumbled at times.
Maybe eliminate some words?
Good stuff though, nice work.